How to Write A Fiction Novel, Part 10 – Love Scenes

Let’s not be shy. If you’re going to be a romance author, you will be writing love scenes. The “sweet” romances don’t go past kisses and hand-holding. But other romances whether they be contemporary, paranormal, or historical, have passion unleashed.

There are many books and workshops on this matter that give a great deal more details that I can give in one blog post.

Most authors agree that dialogue is crucial to setting the mood. Words between lovers are everything. It tells you how they feel, what they are willing to commit to physically and emotionally, and their emotional state.

The characters tell so much about themselves by what they to their lover and what they take off and how. How they treat each other whether it’s tender and gentle or playful or lustful abandon reveals so much about their commitment and intent.

Here is an example from Vampire King of New York.  It’s a scene where Max and Evelyn are trying to make some decisions about their budding relationship.


Evelyn hadn’t expected to like Maria and the mountains. It took her back to when Jack took her on a trip to Austria and Eastern Europe. She couldn’t stop looking at the mountains. They made her feel calm. She liked the cragginess, the wind at night. The longer she watched, the more absorbed she became in the story. The evil taking over Austria was the Nazis. When Captain von Trapp is drafted and sings with his family for the last time in the festival, tears ran down her cheeks. Evil waited to escort him to this German ship. “So long, farewell.” It’s only a song, but also a ruse to get them off stage and into hiding. When they left their hiding place in the abbey and went into the mountains to flee to Switzerland, her rapidly beating heart started to calm. Death had been too close. Evelyn knew this feeling very well.

“Did you like it?” Max looked down at her, obviously trying to understand her expression. “All I can feel from you is pain then relief.”

“I understand why you like the movie.”

He kissed her. Evelyn returned the kiss. Her tongue easily parted his lips and stroked his fangs.

“Aieee.” He pushed gently away from her for a moment. “Evelyn, you just asked me for sex. Did you know if you stroked a vampire’s fangs, you’re initiating sex?”

“Yes.” Evelyn looked up at him, feeling every inch the vixen.

He narrowed his eyes. “Are you sure? After what happened today . . .”

She nodded.

Max pulled her into his lap and into a kiss. He worshipped her face with his lips. Tracing her jawline down to her neck, he blazed a hot trail of kisses. In a blur, he moved her under him on the sofa. She never opened her eyes, but trusted in his hands, his body. Max was very aware of how much she trusted him.


To see what happens in this part of the book, visit this link for the R-Rated scene at our adult content site Romance by Starlight at

To see what’s next, check out Vampire King of New York at Amazon in Kindle and Amazon Print at

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If you have missed the other lessons in “How to Write a Fiction Novel,” here they are:

Happy Writing. Next week we will pause to talk about “Conferences.” If you have any questions or comments, feel free to write them in the comments box.

Susan Hanniford Crowley, Amazon Kindle Bestselling Author of Vampire Romance
Where love burns eternal and whispers in the dark!

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4 Responses to How to Write A Fiction Novel, Part 10 – Love Scenes

  1. dave94015 says:

    Reblogged this on dave94015 and commented:
    some tips & examples on how to write a romance novel

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